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If I Were A Shark

January 5, 2011 @ 10:56 AM 10 Comments      

10 Comments

  1. Mrs. Duray
    Wow! We LOVE your shark poem! Did you do your work in Pixie or on a Smartnotebook file? – Mrs. Duray’s 1st Grade Class in Colorado, USA
  2. Tom Jacobs
    Shay,
    What a wonderful poem! The words you used like “bite bite bite” and “flip flap” helped me to really feel and see your shark in action!
    Keep writing!
  3. adunsiger
    I love your poem too! You used so many great adjectives. I really get a picture of the shark in my head. I hope that you’ll write another animal poem.

    Keep on blogging!
    Love,
    Miss Dunsiger
  4. Vicky Saumell
    Hi, Shay!
    What a wonderful poem!
    I could picture the shark swimming menacingly!

    Best,
    Miss Vicky from Argentina
  5. Cyndie Jacobs
    I love your poem too! It paints a picture for me of what a real shark is like in the water. I know that if I were a shark, I wouldn’t be too happy because I don’t like the taste of fish!! :)
  6. Miss Amendola
    What a beautiful poem! Great rhyming with “sight” and “bite”. I could picture the shark swimming and biting as I read it. Guess what: I got to swim with sharks once!

    -Miss Amendola
    Stoney Creek, Ontario
  7. Mrs. Jacobs
    Shay,
    Wow! I felt as if the shark was in the water with me! I will have to be careful the next time I go swimming in the ocean. I hope the next time you write another poem you’ll share it with all of us.
  8. gsandler
    What a beautiful poem! You’re such a wonderful writer! I could really imagine the shark! Awesome job!
    Greta Sandler
    Buenos Aires, Argentina
  9. Laurie Levitt
    A delightful poem! You word choice is wonderful. My favorite line is: Nobody would see me I would glide right pass.

    Keep writing and keep sharing with us.

    Laurie Levitt
    Severna Park, MD
  10. shay
    Dear Mrs. Jacobs

    The shark is not reel,but if it was he would be nice.

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